Jacob Kiss
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I did some editing on your paper. Minor things, really. Here, if you wanna read it.
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Comments on paper:
Kai Taylor: I think you have a really good concept but you have a very conversational tone through out the paper. Fixing this would definitely give the paper a much more scholarly feel to it. You also have many spacing and grammatical issues but this is merely cosmetic. As far as actual content I think you have a really strong base and there is a ton of information in your paper regarding your topic. I feel like I actually understand what you are trying to discover and you made your point pretty clearly.
Comments
Ronniere Whaley: This idea seems very interesting and I would like to see the finished product. If I had to give any advice I would say you need to do a little more planning and make sure everything has been considered when you write your proposal .
Link for You: http://www.pbs.org/wnet/musicinstinct/
I think that you have a great idea, but I think that you need to go more in-depth with your proposal so that there is more to go on when you start writing. So for the research question, are you saying that people who are trained in music, basically, think differently than people who are not? And how will you do the cross cultural research?
Thanks Much
-Sarah Falls :)
Link for You: http://www.pbs.org/wnet/musicinstinct/
I think that you have a great idea, but I think that you need to go more in-depth with your proposal so that there is more to go on when you start writing. So for the research question, are you saying that people who are trained in music, basically, think differently than people who are not? And how will you do the cross cultural research?
Thanks Much
-Sarah Falls :)